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四级写作经典范文及点评：找寻宝藏http://www.sina.com.cn
2007年12月03日 18:31 北文学校
每个人的潜力就像是等待挖掘的宝藏，而只有你自己才能找到宝藏的位置。潜力的发掘，在于打破自身局限性而创造无限的可能。相信自己，冲破局限，找到属于你的宝藏吧！ Search Your Own Treasure Look up to the heavens and imagine the stars and planets are sparkling jewels dancing across the night sky. Your potential is like those jewels with a dazzling array of facets. Put another way, your human potential is virtually unlimited.① Problems arise from a perspective that “potential is a taboo or code word for failure.” It is for fear of failure that we are sometimes afraid to try new things. Realizing that we will not become an instant expert, we sometimes choose to cop out and not even make an attempt to be or try something new.② Perhaps worse yet, sometimes perfunctory efforts are made, unsatisfactory results are obtained, and an “I knew I couldn’t do it and I know I can’t do it” attitude is reinforced and seemingly justified. Refresh yourself from the perspective that so-called “mistakes” do not constitute failure; they are only new lessons to be learned. Failure is really giving up and quitting, as juxtaposed to persevering and persisting. There is universal law that states, “Practice precedes excellence.” Myth and history are filled with stories of individuals who had struggled against all odds and obstacles and just kept after what they truly wanted until they reached their goals successfully. Naturally, we all have our limitations, and prudence dictates that we respect them. However, wisdom encourages us to stretch beyond and transcend our limitations. Keep going on，your treasure is waiting for you. ［236 words］ 行文点评 本文按照总分总的顺序进行阐述。开篇引出主题，第二段和第三段分别从正反两方面论述，思维的局限性对人们发掘潜能，走向成功所带来的不同影响。最后一段进行总结，第一句话以退为进，先承认人的局限性。然后呼吁人们突破局限，发掘潜能。特别是最后一句的点睛之笔，呼应首段，点明主题。 文章开篇意境优美，使读者以一种很平和的心态来品读文章，随后通过比喻将潜能的无限性，也就是文章的主题引入。让人不觉突兀，而且兴趣有加。 好文妙译 找寻宝藏 抬首仰望天空，想象一下，日月星辰仿佛是夜空中闪烁跳跃的宝石。而你的潜能就像那些各个钻面上闪烁着眩目光彩的宝石一般。换句话说，你的潜力实际上是无穷无尽的。 这种“潜力是一种禁忌或失败的代名词”的观点，很容易出现问题。而正因为害怕失败，使得我们有时不敢去尝试新生事物。由于意识到自己不能马上成为行家里手，有时我们就选择了临阵逃脱，甚至连试一下新事物都不愿意。也许更糟糕的是，有时我们会敷衍了事，结果自然差强人意，而这样，就会加强并使这种“我早知道我不行，我知道我干不了”的观点看起来还挺有道理。 振作起来，那些所谓的“错误”并不是失败；它们只不过是你需要吸取的新的教训罢了。真正的失败是“放弃”或“舍弃”，这和“坚忍不拔”或“坚持不懈”正好相反——“成功需要苦练”是一条普适的法则。不管是在神话故事还是在历史当中，到处可见这样的人物：他们追求自己的理想，努力和困阻抗争，不胜利达到目的，决不罢休。 我们都有自己的局限性，这是很自然的。而且出于谨慎，我们还非常重视这些局限性。但是智慧却鼓励我们跨出并超越我们自身的局限性。继续前进吧，你的宝藏在等待着你。 词汇斟酌 sparkle v. 发光，闪烁 dazzling a. 令人眼花缭乱的，耀眼的 array n. 展示，陈列 facet n. 面，刻面，平面 taboo n. 禁忌 perfunctory a. 马马虎虎的，敷衍 juxtapose vt. 并排，并置 persevering a. 坚韧的，不屈不挠的 odds n. 不平等，差异，可能性 prudence n. 审慎 佳句临摹 ①【注释】put another way换句话说 【临摹】He soon found what he did had already been done by others，put another way, he was wasting his time. 他很快发现他所做的事情是别人已经做过的。换句话说，他在浪费自己的时间。 ②【注释】cop out 是一个含有贬义的俚语，意思是逃避、推诿、临阵退缩。 【临摹】Don’t try to cop out of it by telling me you’re too busy!别告诉我你太忙来推脱责任。 思如泉涌 Once we stop growing, our end is near.一旦我们停止成长，那么我们的末日也就为时不远了。 Wonders are many, and nothing is more wonderful than man.天下奇迹无数，却无一比人更奇妙。 特别说明：由于各方面情况的不断调整与变化，新浪网所提供的所有考试信息仅供参考，敬请考生以权威部门公布的正式信息为准。
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