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2011年6月英语四级作文范文标准版(沪江版)

http://www.sina.com.cn   2011年06月18日 13:04   新浪教育微博

  2011年大学英语四级考试已结束,新浪网教育频道第一时间收集整理试题及参考答案,供考生参考,以下为沪江网校版四级作文范文标准版。

  Doing Shopping Online

  With the development of the Internet, shopping is no longer a tiring thing. Just click your mouse to choose the articles you like, and the purchase is done. You don’t even have to step out of the room. It seems all easy and quick。

  However, people’s opinions vary on this trend. Some believe that on line shopping is time and money saving. With plentiful selection options, they can buy whatever they like at any time convenient. Still others insist that mis-purchasing alone is annoying enough, not to mention the credibility of the sellers and the safety of their accounts。

  In my opinion, the convenience and excitement of on line shopping is beyond all doubts. In the meantime, we must always bear in mind that certain traps do exist, so we’d better make sure the sellers are trustworthy before buying. In addition, we should also guard ourselves from the potential hackers who might steal our account information。

  文章点评

  这是一篇“中等偏上”的学生作文。 本文先对网购热潮进行简介,引出全篇;接着对网络购物的正反两方面进行对比;最后提出自己的看法结束全篇。整体看思路清晰,逻辑严密,行文流畅,用语较为地道。

  下面说一下这篇文章的有待提高之处:

  1. 文章结构上,能看得出该同学试图采用议论文的“三段式”(提出问题、分析问题、解决问题)。 但是,以“With the development of the Internet”为开首语,有些落入俗套,有硬套模板的嫌疑。稍加注意,应该能写出更好的句子。

  2. 微观语言点方面,有些语句稍显啰嗦,比如With plentiful selection options… 简化成With plentiful selections… 更好,意思没有丝毫减损,表达力反而增强许多。

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