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2011年12月英语四级作文范文及评析(沪江版)

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  专题:第一时间发布2011年四六级考试答案和解析

  2011年12月大学英语四级考试已结束,新浪网教育(微博)频道第一时间收集整理试题及参考答案,供考生参考,以下为沪江版四级英语作文范文及评析。

  Part I Writing

  Nothing Succeeds Without a Strong Will

  Nothing runs smoothly in our life. To achieve things successfully, a strong will is essential. Life is like a Marathon. Many people can’t get to the terminal. This is not because they are lack of vitality but because their will of success is not strong enough。

  To take quitting smoking as an example, some regard it as a piece of cake. They make up their minds to quit it in the morning, but in the evening they feel that the smell of cigarettes is tempting. Their throats are sore, their mouths are thirsty, and their hands are shaking. After the painful mental struggle, they tell themselves that “One cigarette is enough. Just take one, and the next day I will quit it。” By doing this, they surrender to their weak will. In the end, they have quitted smoking “a hundred times”, but in no time they succeed。

  Just like quitting smoking, nothing succeeds without a strong will. To be successful in one’s life, a strong will means that you know where you go and you will persist on the road you choose. Undoubtedly success belongs to those who overcome their weak will and who hang in there until the last minute。

  文章点评

  本文属于话题类作文,只看题目 “Nothing Succeeds without a strong will”考生会觉得比较抽象,难以下手。细看题目说明中给出了提示,要求考生结合戒烟屡次不成功的幽默引语对该话题进行分析阐述。

  总体来说,这是一篇“中等偏上”的考生作文。本文先点题指出“坚强意志”的重要性;第二段从反面举例阐述——具体描写了意志不坚定者的心理活动,阐述为什么会戒烟失败;最后从戒烟延伸到生活中的其他事情,并复述坚强意志的内涵,点题收尾。

  总体上来看,文章思路清晰,采用了生动的比喻和形象的心理描写,语言流畅,用语地道。

  但一些重复表达(如第二段和第三段中的weak will)显得单调,可用shaky ones, weak-willed persons,the strong-willed等灵活表达。在备考中,多积累不同表达,相信会写出更生动的文章。

  在论述上,叙述略显罗嗦。第二段心理描写过多,虽然流畅生动,但却使这篇考场作文超过了规定字数,反而成为失分点,这一点要引以为戒。

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