原稿

　　There is a rich man who likes mountaineering. One day, he came to a lonely place and there is a high mountain surround cloud there. He tried to mountain it up. Then he found a very nice environment. It likes heaven！He was very happy. After coming back home, he decided to take a risk to invest a lot of money on the construction of the mountain. Two years later, the mountain became nicer than before. Thousands of people came to visit. He established a tourism company. Up to now his business has expanded from having one office to having twelve. He acquires an experience which risk is half done of success. (By张文颖)

　　修改后

　　There was a rich man who liked mountaineering. One day, he went to a remote mountain whose peak was surrounded in clouds. He managed to climb to the top，where he found a very nice environment. It looked like heaven！He was very happy. After coming back home, he decided to take a risk by investing a lot of money in the construction of the mountain area. Two years later, the mountain became nicer than before. Thousands of people came to visit it. He established a tourist company. Up to now，his business expanded from one office to twelve. From this experience, he acquired the knowledge that success doesn't come without risk.