一、写作说明

　　仔细观察下面的图画，然后解释每一幅图画所代表的意义，并合理预测烟草未来销售的情况，说明你的理由：

　　二、学生习作

　　We meet smokers everywhere. There are 5.8 billion people in the world, and there are① about 1.2 billion of them are smokers, which make up to 20 percent of the world's total population.

　　Smoking is very harmful. First, smoking costs a great number② of money. It wastes 200 billion dollars each year in the world. Second, smoking does harm to the health of smokers and even the people near them. About 3 million people die of disease③ caused by smoking every year.

　　Luckily, more and more people have come to realize the great harm of smoking. To our delight the total amount of world tobacco production have④ dropped from over 14 billion pounds in 2000 to 7 billion pounds in 2003. It is sure⑤ that the number of smokers will farther⑥ decrease gradual⑦.

　　三、修改说明

　　①该句为双谓语错误句型，应去掉there are。②money为不可数名词，number应改为deal。③吸烟所造成的疾病较多，disease应改为diseases。④主语amount为不可数名词，作主语动词应用单数，have应改为has。⑤sure不可用于主语从句，应改为certain。⑥此处表进一步的，应用further而不可用farther。⑦decrease为行为动词，应用副词修饰，gradual应改为gradually。

　　四、参考答案

　　We meet smokers everywhere. There are 5.8 billion people in the world, and about 1.2 billion of them are smokers, which make up to 20 percent of the world's total population.

　　Smoking is very harmful. First, smoking costs a great deal of money. It wastes 200 billion dollars each year in the world. Second, smoking does harm to the health of smokers and even the people near them. About 3 million people die of diseases caused by smoking every year.

　　Luckily, more and more people have come to realize the great harm of smoking. To our delight the total amount of world tobacco production has dropped from over 14 billion pounds in 2000 to 7 billion pounds in 2003. It is certain that the number of smokers will further decrease gradually.

　　五、点评

　　本篇书面表达习作为看图作文，符合高考英语书面表达写作新要求。And, First, Second, Luckily, To our delight等过渡性词汇的使用增加了文章的连贯性、逻辑性和可读性。首句的警示作用和末句的激励作用号召人民在戒烟问题上既要有紧迫感又要有充分的信心。up to, even等情感性副词的使用能唤醒人们对吸烟危害的关注，具有强烈的感染性。非限制性定语从句、过去分词作定语、主语从句等高级表达方式的运用提升了文章的表达档次。但本文也存在一些不足之处，出现了双谓语错误、易混词误用错误、名词单复数错误、主谓语一致错误、形容词副词混用错误等。

　　作者：江苏省如皋市城南中学 郝鹏程

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