I live in a small town called Xinghua in Xuzhou. There are no trains in my hometown. So I never see trains except on TV or in the movie. I would like to visit them one day very much. To my joy, on January 21st, 2004 — the day before the Spring Festival — my dream came true.

　　On the early morning, I got up. After a quick breakfast, I rode a bike to a small town about eight kilometres from my hometown. When I got there, I found a lot of people waiting for the train. It was seven, a train was coming with a long whistle and came up to a stop before us. As soon as the train stopped completely, I jumped onto her at once and touched her. She looked like a big and long worm with sixteen cars. She was about over two metres tall... After about ten minutes, she went away. And then I went back home happily.

　　I spent only about ten minutes visiting the train, but I will not forget the first visit to her forever.

　　教师点评:

　　对于生活在农村的孩子来说,看到真正的火车还真是一件不容易的事。在这篇习作中,字里行间无不流露出小作者这种兴奋、急切与好奇的心情。本文行文流畅,意思连贯,句子间的连接成分用得十分恰当得体,如文中的after,when,as soon as,then等词的使用,而且可看出小作者有一定的词汇量。作为初一的学生来说的确是一篇难得的记事佳作!

　　(文/焦恒婕 朱贤兵 英语辅导报牛津七年级普及版2004-2005学年第23期；版权归英语辅导报社所有独家网络合作伙伴新浪教育，未经许可，不得以任何形式进行转载。)