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四级写作经典范文及点评：校园爱情http://www.sina.com.cn
2007年12月05日 14:28 北文学校
爱情是人类世界永恒不变的话题。有人说缺少爱情会让生活索然无味，而有些人却认为，爱情让人变得盲目，缺少理性。爱情更是大学校园的敏感话题。 Love in College As a college student, campus is our home, a warm and sunny house, you can find the vigor to live and sustain for ever. But do remember there is unusual scenery you should pay great attention to, that is the love in the campus. When it comes to this theme, various words rushed into my mind, sweet, happy, love for ever, everything sounds to be wonderful. However, our elders always exaggerate about love in college. They believe that it is a waste of time and money. It will make students to forget their studies and eventually may even destroy their lives. As for me, although I am looking forward to having an excellent boy study and live with me, it is just a dream actually.① We are still children, do not have enough experience in love; we do not take in the spirit of true love.② For us it is just a good feeling, a slight feeling because of well-dressed or handsome appearance, not by instinct. How about the personality or her habits, we do not know, we just love because of her beauty. Love depending on this will certainly go not so further, one day, you find you two are unable to share in the same way, you will quit, leaving tears fallen down. It turns out that love in the campus is commonly short and dreamful. I think after you become mature enough, then you can use your sharp eyes to recognize people, find who you really suit to, then, take it seriously.③ ［261 words］ 行文点评 本文遵循总分总结构模式对校园爱情这个话题进行了分析和阐述。第一段引出话题，第二段列举长辈的意见提出对校园爱情反对的观点。随后在下一段中作者又进一步提出自己对校园爱情的看法。最后一段作为总结，提出希望和建议。 文章结构精巧，论证有力，正反对比加强了论证的效果。段落之间运用了however，as for me 这样的过渡词使文章思路更加清晰，一目了然。certainly, seriously这样的词汇更使作者的态度鲜明确定。文章使用口语体的形式，所以在一些连接词的使用上没有过于遵守语法规则，这一点需要注意。 好文妙译 校园爱情 作为一个大学生，校园就是我们的家，是充满温馨和阳光的大家园，在这里我们活力四射，朝气蓬勃。但是，别忘了，你也应该注意到有这样一道特殊风景正在悄悄蔓延，那就是校园爱情。每当提起这个字眼，各种美好的景象不禁使我浮想联翩，甜蜜，幸福，一生一世，所有这一切听起来都如此美妙。 相反，长辈们却总是过于夸大大学里的爱情。他们认为爱情只是在浪费时间和金钱，而且会使学生们荒废学业，最终可能会毁掉他们的一生。 而对于我来说，尽管也期待着有个优秀的男孩相伴，一起读书和生活，但这只不过是一个梦罢了。我知道我们还都只是稚气未脱的孩子，缺乏恋爱的经验，我们并没有领悟爱情的精髓。爱情对于我们来说，可能只是一种好感，一种受穿着和外表吸引的微妙情愫，并非出于本性。关于对方的性格喜好我们一无所知，我们只是倾心于她美丽的容颜。这样的爱情并不会长久，直到有一天你终于发现你们再没有任何共同点，于是你们选择放弃这段感情，并为此黯然落泪。于是校园爱情往往只是短暂的梦幻。 我认为，只有真正走向成熟以后，你才具备足够敏锐的眼光去认识别人，最终找到真正适合自己的另一半，然后珍视你们的感情。 词汇斟酌 vigor n. 精力，活力 sustain vt. 维持，持续 scenery n. 风景，景色 exaggerate v. 夸大，夸张 instinct n. 本能，直觉，天性 personality n. 人格，个性 佳句临摹 ①【注释】look forward to期待做…，盼望…. 【临摹】They are looking forward to her visit.他们在期待着她的来访。 ②【注释】take in理解，吸收 【临摹】We couldn’t take in the meaning of the word.我们无法理解这个词的含义。 ③【注释】take sth. seriously严肃对待…，认真看待… 【临摹】You should step away from the video games，and take your study seriously.你应该远离电子游戏，认真对待学业。 思如泉涌 Love me little, love me long. 爱不贵亲密，贵长久。 Love is blind. 爱情是盲目的。 特别说明：由于各方面情况的不断调整与变化，新浪网所提供的所有考试信息仅供参考，敬请考生以权威部门公布的正式信息为准。
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