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考研英语40篇大作文演练与点评第5篇
5 Study the following picture carefully and write an essay in which you should:
1. describe the picture；
2. interpret the meaning of the picture;
3. make your comment.
You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.
近年来大作文的潮流有二：一个是有关社会热点问题的文章，另一个就是哲理性的文章。虽然到目前为止前者明显多于后者，而且纯粹的后一种类型的文章更少，但是我们认为，随着社会的发展和考试的演变，后一种类型的题目会越来越多。即使某篇文章不是纯粹的哲理性的文章，其思辨性的层层深入和逻辑推理的加强仍很可能是未来的方向。
该题的这幅图画并不复杂，我们应该配合图下的一句话来看。第一段可以非常简单地对图进行描述，并将图下那句意味深长的话译出。第二段应对这句话进行解释。第三段联系到日常生活中的现象。第四段是结论段。In the picture, a bird, resting on a branch, is looking up into the sky. Under the picture there is a sentence: “For the birds that cannot soar, God has provided low branches.”
I cant help thinking a lot over this meaningful and thoughtprovoking proverb. It is natural for us to admire eagles that can fly high in the clouds, but there are fundamental differences between eagles and those little birds. While eagles are resting among the high mountains, little birds can always find their own low branches.
In my belief, this contrast resembles our real life in at least two aspects. In the first place, a person should come to terms with himself and the world around him. He should not be frustrated with what is beyond his reach. He should be content to go as far as he could. Moreover, we should never be afraid to give our best to what seemingly are little jobs. If we do such jobs well, the big ones tend to take care of themselves. Most people would succeed in small things if they were not troubled with great ambitions.
Up until now we finally realize that little birds that cannot soar can always find their own low branches and write their own life stories. It is magical and incredible for us to find that if we come to understand our own limits and try our best inside such limits, we may go beyond them and accomplish wonders eventually. 第一段非常简练：第一句描述图画，第二句译出图下的那句话。这句话一定要译好，因为它包含了图画中的深意，为下文的充分展开作铺垫，是全文的关键。
第二段是对这句话的解释，包含三句话。第一句是个常用句型，中间有形容词的平行结构。第二句突显对比，说我们羡慕展翅高飞的雄鹰很正常，但是鹰与图中所画的小鸟是有根本区别的。当鹰在群山间栖息之时，小鸟也总能找到属于它们自己的低矮的树枝。
第三段最为关键。这一段将鹰与小鸟的区别与我们的真实生活作了比较。首先，一个人应该与他自己以及他周围的世界达成妥协。他不应该为超过他能力范围的事烦恼，而应该满足于在能力许可的范围内取得最大的成功。这一点中的几句话均来自《大学英语(修订本)》第二册第三课The Professor and the YoYo一文，该文以细腻的笔触近距离地描述了Einstein作为普通人的一面，其中第二段给人留下了深刻的印象：
…He was the only person I knew who had come to terms with himself and the world around him. He knew what he wanted and he wanted only this: to understand within his limits as a human being the nature of the universe and the logic and simplicity in its functioning. He knew there were answers beyond his intellectual reach. But this did not frustrate him. He was content to go as far as he could.
我们借鉴该文，将其中精华提炼出来，放入我们的文章中。
第三段第二点说我们应该永远都竭尽全力将小事做好——做好了小事，大事也就迎刃而解了。这句话中的take care of非常精彩，请大家细细品味。另举几句名言为例来看看take care of的精彩用法：
I recommend you to take care of the minutes, for the hours will take care of themselves. (Lord Chesterfield)
If I take care of my character, my reputation will take care of itself. (D.L.Moody)
If you go in for argument, take care of your temper. Your logic, if you have any, will take care of itself. (Joseph Farrell)
而后说，如果不被伟大的抱负困扰，大多数人将在小事上获得成功。这一点中暗引了两句名言：
Dont be afraid to give your best to what seemingly are small jobs. Every time you conquer one it makes you that much stronger. If you do the little jobs well, the big ones tend to take care of themselves.(Dale Carnegie)
Most people would succeed in small things if they were not troubled with great ambitions.
(Henry Wadsworth Longfellow)
最后一段是结论段，共分两句话。第一句话说，到现在为止我们终于理解了不能高飞的鸟儿也能找到属于自己的低矮的树枝、写下自己人生故事的道理。该句中的平行结构非常出彩。如果说平行之间见变化是直接获得加分的高级技法，那么这里的变化并不在于长短的变化，而是具体与抽象、已知与未知的关系。最后一句又说到我们自己——这一句更进一步，说如果我们了解了自身的局限并在此范围内竭尽所能的话，我们反而可能突破该限制，而最终创造奇迹。
这一段的精彩之处颇多。首先，这两句话的层递关系与第二段到第三段的层递关系是相同的。其次，最后一句话颇有石破天惊的感觉，同时又是对第三段前面一半的隐性呼应。Einstein正是由于能与自己和现实世界达成妥协，熟知自己的局限性而在此范围内倾力而为，所以创出惊人的成绩。同样地，如果我们了解自己的局限而尽力而为，也完全可能创造奇迹。这样就从另一个角度深入解释并积极拓展了图中原句的涵义。同时该句也避免了达到过犹不及的地步，没有说小鸟一定能变成雄鹰，到最高的天空飞翔。
最后一句中的accomplish wonders表示“创造奇迹”。该文哲理性很强。大家应在平时养成思考问题的习惯，这样考试中才能镇定自若，游刃有余。反过来说，即使遇到自己不熟悉的题目，也不要着急。一定要相信自己，通过思考能够圆满地解决问题。
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