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考研英语40篇大作文演练与点评第6篇
6 Study the following drawing carefully and write an essay in which you should:
1. describe the drawing,
2. interpret its meaning, and
3. make your comment.
You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.
该文分三段。第一段描述图画并定性说这种做法是极端危险的。第二段从两个方面进行剖析。最后一段表明自己的观点，并提出解决办法。In the picture presented to us, a person is investing all the money in the stock market—he even sells his car and raises a mortgage on his apartment. To me, a bystander, this is an extremely dangerous action.
Why has he become so crazy? He must be dreaming of making big money one day, but does he know that it has become exceedingly difficult for individual investors to survive in todays stock market? On the one hand, the market is full of institutional investors who are equipped with not only advanced techniques but also latest information. On the other hand, anyone is told that only a small part of people will make money in the market when he enters the market, but when his mind is full of greedy ideas, how can he carry out careful analysis and comprehensive reasoning so as to make sound judgment?
Personally I do not agree with the above choice at all. My suggestion is that anyone who wants to make money should receive professional training and then practice in the virtual market for at least a year. If a person can not do that, he had better leave this place full of danger and risks, for it will often be too late when he realizes that the cost is unbearable.第一段对图画进行了描述。而后立即对这种做法进行定性，显得相当果断。如果不加这句话，第一段则只有一句，显得有点短了。
第二段首先使用一短一长两个反问句的经典用法，非常有力——他为什么变得如此疯狂？他一定想赚大钱，但是他知道在今天的股市中个人投资者的生存已变得极端困难了吗？而后分两方面谈：先说市场中充斥着兼具技术和信息的机构投资者；而后说每个人进场前都听说只有少数人赚钱，但是当脑中充满贪欲之时，哪里还能用细致分析和充分推理来帮助做出正确的判断呢？
第三段的首句斩钉截铁地表示自己不同意上述的选择。而后提出建议：任何人进入市场前必须经过专业培训，并且在虚拟股市中锤炼至少一年。如果做不到，就应该远离这充满危险的地方。要想在大作文上得到高分，是很不容易的事情。“文似看山不喜平”，在结构和内容达到要求之后，语言上可以作一点变化。该文的第二段共使用了三处反问句，这是一种相当新颖的手法。一般来说，连用两个反问句已经是一种高级写法，主要有两个平行反问句(如均是条件状语从句加反问句)和一短一长两种情形。这里用了三个反问句，与看到图中人物极度不理智的做法后的一吐为快的心情是相吻合的。
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